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what i have learned from this class is to create a argument. And to create a argument, one must read through the information carefully. a student must achieve the goals of close reading. close reading helps one to focus on the rhetorical questions rather than just general thesis driven essays. while having a close reading on a certain paper, audience will be able to locate the literature devices and find out how the author have been trying to convey the readers through the process of giving imageries. a great example would be argumentative analysis essay, the author will trying to create a argument and analyze the pros and cons in different position, which will help the audience to see in different perspective. a great essay must not only covers a single view point, but also multiple view points, thus become a convincing paper.

Performance, feedback, revision

I think that being able to do revisions on certain ideas are important. this makes human able to correct himself from mistakes. mistakes are from wrong decisions and decisions are made through process of thoughts. the process of human thoughts are not computers, we human often make mistakes. for example, the essays we write in class, one often mistakenly write something that means the other unintended, sentence structure, grammar, misspell, or sentences that just doesn't make sense at all.  

in class, we make revisions from our drafts, this is a good way to find out that if there can be a improvement on the paper. through the work done on the paper, the student will be able to revision and learn a better way of writing. 

Essay 2

When I first finished the second research essay, i realize that i'm not actually touching the points that i was aiming for. I found a lot not grammar errors and structure errors, but also miss use of vocabularies that would throw off the readers. through the process, i only compared my own idea to wests article, i wasn't sure if we need to put the comparison to another article in the paper; which might be a mistake too. Over all, i would give myself a 3 out of 4, I'll need more time to work on this. For the peer readers, i wish it can be focused editing on the idea and sentence structure errors. I probably will have to set up a meeting at the TLC that will help me on this essay.

Where do you plan to go with your essay? What are you struggling with?

At first I was really confused about the topic of the essay, after reading some research paper; I'm deciding to analyze my own blog that will reveal my personality. I'll first list what I think my personality is like, and prove these identities from the examples. Learning from Wests Article, I'll be using a data table to help organize ideas that comes from close reading my own writing. Listing the tones and emotions of the writer, myself, and relate them to the ideas. Later I’ll be integrating my blog not only with West article, but also Rak's article. Rak, Julie. "The Digital Queer: Weblogs and Internet Identity." Biography 28.1 (2005): 166-82. Print. "The rhetorical strategies in this segment of the blogging community do not differ much from those of other bloggers, because blogging as a genre tends to consolidate its own practices and subjects as one of its effects."(RaK). Using Raks idea, I can show how one writer is creating his/her own environment with blog. What troubles me the most is finding the right article to integrate into my blog. I spent long time reading over articles until realizing that the article I’m reading isn't the one that i needed. Finding the topic to analyze upon has given me the difficulty while coming up with a plan on the essay.

West's connection with my essay

West's research paper indicates how one new technology can impact in a class room. A teacher is able to view more in depth of student's life. She analyzes couple examples to relate her answer to the research question. In my essay, i might come up with similar process, but with my own paper. i'm going to look at my own paper and see how it is identifying my own characteristic. After writing for class over almost a quarter, we are actually creating a self image online. I'm going to analyze my own level of literary and viewing my own posts from a third person view. A third person view allows the writer to rearrange the meaning of his own articles; rethink the meaning of the composed writing and reanalyze the insight of the author himself. We, as students, will be more able to rethink possible ways of creating better image of him/herself through composing art.

How will you apply West's essay to your essay?

From what i have read from West's article, the author uses several tools to analyze a blog. For example, a table that labels the elements of the literary devices that can be defining a writer's identity. Cathleen uses the tables to clearly label out the characteristics in a person's writing and rationally relate them to one identity. My essay will be using the second topic choice, "Apply West’s framework to examine any blog of your choice to make an argument about how identity is expressed online".  I will be analyzing other's essay, put them in a form of table and relating the elements. Separating the topics that will help me organize the subjects, and explaining how this would answer my question. 

Engage with the West's article and talk about what you find to be significant.

In the article by West, he questions himself with blogging, "What is the nature of literary response
as communicated via weblog?", he answers himself with responses like Theoretical framework and
research methods, and “Serious literature students” meet “Web-literate communicators”. He compares the Theoretical framework and methods. He made tables for different blogs. I find it organized and clear to make these tables. He compares Situated meanings, Social languages, Discourse models, and Situated identities; he puts examples under the categories. "Although the social languages involved in being a serious literature student and a Webliterate communicator are certainly inter-textual in themselves", the author relates the importance relation between of literature and blogging. He conclude the article by stating the pros and cons of blogging, being able to understand the students more.

essay 1

During the process of writing essay for the analysis of the blog, how it can be identifying the personality of the author, I learned that one has to make argument and pull the audience into the conversation in order to be rational to make a point. When i'm writing the draft, there was a constant revising stage. start an argument when writing a paper. One has to learn how to pull the audience into the same situation and thinking. One must set hooks for the readers. One must tell audience some interesting information about the topic.
Relating to my topic from blogs because the blog that I'm researching on is a organization blog even though I'm trying to look at a individuals writing, we can still see a person's personality from other people's description.

reflecting on my first essay in Tcore 101

In the very first essay we work on together in class, I did a research on Trumps blog. Donald Trump is a Business successor who owns real estate companies and world casino hotels. He is a bright public figure. When i first started this essay, i didn't know who he is; only thing that interested me was the fact that he is an investor. Not only an investor, he’s also a teacher that tells people how to have the right attitude for the hardships. 

By writing this paper, i learned how to start an argument when writing a paper. One has to learn how to pull the audience into the same situation and thinking. One must set hooks for the readers. One must tell audience some interesting information about the topic. The main idea is to reflect the public thinking and add writer’s own thinking.

They say, I say

What I would revise my essay is to trying to relate what the audience already know and written back and forth to keep reminding the readers what the argument is. In the book author talks about how one can reinforce his essay by using some of the templates. These templates should help the writer to develop a better language. I would take some of the templates to do so. I'll need to relate what the argument is to the audience constantly. I'll try to summarize my view points in to couple sentences in the introduction that will help give a better image of my argument. 

Presentation

When I had my presentation, I was really nervous to make mistakes. Especially because that English is my second language, I know I'll have heavy accent when I gets really nervous. I started introduce myself to class and going through the slides. I stare at my laptop and reading off them, at the same time trying to cover some material that's not in the power-point.
It would have been better if I didn't get so nervous and felt more content about my presentation. If I'm a grader, I would give myself a 3. I know I didn't make a great presentation but it was not as bad as I thought when I'm walking around asking people what they think about what I presented.
What I would make it better next time will be, trying to cover more stuff not in context, but in my speech.

Identify a section from Blogging that can be related to your essay and discuss it in this week's entry.

"There are many reasons to blog. in general, blogging is a way of communication directly with customers without having to use the media as an intermediary."(142, Blogging). This can be related to my topic because the blog that I'm researching on is a organization blog even though I'm trying to look at a individuals writing, we can still see a person's personality from other people's description.

What changes do you intend to make to your essay based on feedback in the writing conference?

After the conference, I had a better idea on how to construct my essay. We look over the details and the logic of each group member. In my essay, there was error’s on the structure, for example, some examples or quotations do not go alone with the commentary, or the commentary does not relate to the thesis. I rewrite everything but the introduction paragraph. I put down definition of blog and how blog can identify characteristics and personality on the first body paragraph. Later on I explain how the blog can be related to a person’s life style. The conference gave me a better direction of the logic toward the essay.

what I hope to learn from blogging

One’s identity is found throughout the writing of blogs. A blog is a website of articles on certain topics; analyzing through them, we can find how one person is related to our community. Author of the book Blogging, Jill Walker Rettberg, argues that a blog reveals a person’s thoughts, unsecure societies backgrounds, and most important first-hand reports events.
Looking at the topic of World Marketing will show how a blog can be influential to the community; a good example will be the Trump blog. Trump is a successful businesses man who owns series of real estate. One can look through his tips for how to become more successful. We can find that his blogs are usually written by himself and other marketing experts. Most articles are about facts the most recent marketing chances around the globe. This can cause the audience to pay close attention to what a successful money-making person said and follow his information.
“Eisenstein numbers six features of print that caused changes in our culture: dissemination, standardization, reorganization, data collection, preservation, amplification and reinforcement.”(37), blogging has most at the amplification and preservation because blog is viewed by millions of people and we can read through the analysis to re-think our next step. “Blogs and the social publishing and communication forms that have developed on the web are part of this larger picture of communication and publishing through the ages” (56), the author stated that blog is a new term of communication which will also increase the speed of process in the business world too.

"Blogging" by Jill Walker Rettberg review

In the book Blogging by Jill Walker Rettberg, author analysis what blog really means to the world. It is a new communication tool that we use to write and view the society’s viewpoint freely on some particular object or event. As he stated in the book, that internet never forgets, some information one person will stay forever. Rettberg argues if that bloggers are journalist. Most blogger think themselves are not, but just some writers that wants to express their mind freely. “In twentieth-century democratic societies, people wishing to have their words and ideas published or broadcast had to contend with editorial policies that were generally based on ideology of on what advertisers would support of the public buy.”(84).
Bloggers use the blogs to create the self that they actually want to become. It is never sure if the narrators the audience is reading is a real person or not; one can be completely made up by talented writer who fools almost everyone. “whether they are fictional or not, narratives in blogs differ in several ways from traditional print or cinematic narratives.”(126).

interests and consider type of blog I want to study

When we read an article, we usually want to read our interested subjects. I consider World Issue as the subject I want to study. I’m always interested on the issues around the world politically and economically.
I want to learn more about the interesting facts of global economy that might be beneficial in the future. Most philosopher try to convey people that life is not all about money and happiness is reachable without being financial supported. It is true that we can get happiness from what we think “love” is. Love is defined differently from each person. We sometimes defined that love is about being cared and cared about someone. Not only Love, we also get happiness from chasing a dream. I believe that most people that are reading this article have a dream about living with some amount of wealth. Wealth is defined as “the state of having plenty of money or possessions” (Encarta dictionary). We set our goals in order to have something to fight for, maybe a better life. Most goals will require some amount of wealth to achieve.
I do have some life-term goals. In order to achieve these goals, I have to be financially supported by knowing what is happening globally; one needs to know enough facts to ensure no failure on the investments.

Me as an writter

When I look at myself, I view myself as someone who is trying to figure things out through texts that will convey me with logic and evidence. I’m not a natural English speaker but I believe that I can improve myself through practices.
I do reading a lot but not always in English, sometimes in Chinese. Usually have some light reading before I went to bed if I am not too tired throughout the day. My favorite was reading something narrative that’s written in organized clear thoughts. For example, the book Sorrow of War by Bao Minh was not a great book for me because the timeline and events of the book was never clear; my favorite book was Kindred by Octavia E. Butler I read over summer.
I often find that writing an analysis essay after reading a book always helps me understand better in literature. I challenge myself with reading books that are beyond my level of the language. I overcome the challenges with doing some research on the internet and reading reviews from other reader. When reading about certain historic events, it is always easier to understand what the author is trying to convey the audience by doing some research on the event.
When I can find what I’m looking for, I usually turn to my tutors at the tutoring center. They always give me a hand on what I should do with the essay by showing some other pieces of writings. I view writing is a way of art that can express myself through the letters. There is a difference between a speech and writing. One can do editing and changes before publishing a paper. I do blogging when I have some thoughts that I want to share with others. I like to attach pictures to the blogs and my comments to share my views at some certain events.
As a writer, I usually write for school assignments and emails. School assignments can vary from couple sentences to essay that are as long as fifteen pages. When I’m writing an analysis paper, I usually try to view the object being analyzed from multiple perspectives and avoiding bias. I imagine myself as an editor that is trying to give back some feedback to the author.
As I stated earlier, I am not a natural English speaker; I moved to states when I was thirteen. It wasn’t easy when I don’t know what was going on most of the time in class. I improved a lot from studying the vocabularies and reading literature. I love challenging classes because I view these challenges as a lesson that would make my life easier later. I’m a reader, writer, and critical thinker that love to learn through challenges.